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i'm built on broken bones and metronomes
her alto trills, his hollow tones
a second verse she'll never know
so sweet and sweet and down we go

the cords stretch and scratch but never match
the off beat tears he'll surely catch
the droplets lead a song of their own
recorded on heartstrings, a song i know

his words they ring and the hurt they bring
it's been so long but i choose to sing
and maybe he'll hear the music we make
( it's been so long but i choose to break. )
i'm sick and my mind is on music and a inner fight to continue writing a little story of mine.

edit: oh my gosh, i am speechless. thank you so much for the D.D (it's my first) :iconloveloveplz:
edit2: I AM OVERFLOWING WITH EMOTION. Thank you all SO much for your kind words and favorites.
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Given 2013-01-02
harmonize by ~Kiirohi ( Suggested by 0hgravity and Featured by thorns )
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FieryDownpour479 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I stumbled across this ages ago, but I only favorited it. I never left you a comment, which seems silly to me know considering how much I love this piece! I constantly go back to it, because I love it so much. It's probably one of my most favorite poems I have ever heard or read. It's so beautiful, and because I love music probably more than anything else, that just makes this even more special. I cannot express how much I love this piece, but I do want you to know just how wonderful it is :)
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zwecat Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013   Digital Artist
Wow, thank you for your comment! :iconblushingplz: Your words really mean a lot to me.  I'm glad that you found this piece so enjoyable, and are also a fellow music lover.  I in fact wrote this with some feelings still lingering around over my very last choral class.  Thank you once again!! 
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:iconfierydownpour479:
FieryDownpour479 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You are very welcome! I'm very glad I was able to read this piece! And you are welcome again! :meow:
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Adonael Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Found this through the features but only just realised it made DD as well. Congratulations!

I really enjoyed the rhythm of it - iambic quadrameter??
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:iconzwecat:
zwecat Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013   Digital Artist
Thanks! And I wish I could say I went through a lot of planning for this, but I just went with what felt/sounded right. ^^;
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:iconadonael:
Adonael Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome. To be fair, it's often the best way.
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dreamsinstatic Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013
Your fantastic work has been featured in Friday Night Features.
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:iconzwecat:
zwecat Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013   Digital Artist
Thank you! :D
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dreamsinstatic Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013
You're welcome.
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saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
lovely. truly lovely. (but i caught a typo; i belive it is chords in music, but perhaps you did mean cords...)
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:iconzwecat:
zwecat Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013   Digital Artist
Ah yes, I did mean cords. :D It was with vocal cords in mind.
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sosolaphie Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013
Beautiful <3
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:icondarkerhours:
DarkerHours Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Damn, it made me cry.
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DustinPanzino Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
I love this, very well written, and deserved DD !
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REDandYELLOWZ Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
this is beautiful...
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trueshinken Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow. Just... wow.
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VIILovelessVII Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013
;A; i love you..
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:iconzwecat:
zwecat Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013   Digital Artist
I love you too :iconbrohugplz

:D
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VIILovelessVII Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013
aw, i feel loved now <3 :iconsupertighthugplz:
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falling-like-rain Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is beautiful :clap:
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Rhiannfleming Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013
That is really good!! I love the rhyming :)
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ExtremeYaoiFanatic Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Beautiful. Nothing but beautiful.
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snowywolf13 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
This is really great. Great rhyming and concept. Congrats on the DD, you deserve it! :)
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:iconkarinta:
Karinta Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Student General Artist
Very nice rhyme scheme. Simple.
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:iconcr2o3:
Cr2O3 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013
holy wow
perfect poem
so unimaginably great
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Haru01 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Professional Writer
Wow!
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013
Fabulous job with the rhyme. :heart: It doesn't feel forced at all, and the whole poem just flows so smoothly... :huggle:
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MrWootton Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Professional Writer
love that first line.
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chriscstick Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Amazing poem! love the emotion, moved me to tears for a bit :D

P.S. Congrats on the DD and happy new year!
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm not much of a rhyme-fan, but this was fantastic! I love the language and the flow and the rhyme! Awesome! ^^

A well-deserved DD! :huggle:
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TheRedBoots Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is amazing! Well done! Congrats on the DD, you totally deserved it! This poem is amazing!
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xHyacintho Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is amazing. Congrats on well deserved DD! :+fav: :aww: :heart:
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JackieStarSister Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
This is interesting and well-written. Nicely done.
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the well deserved DD! :heart:
Have a nice day and Happy New Year! :holly:
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Jon-Wood Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
[link]

I REGRET NOTHING
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:iconzwecat:
zwecat Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013   Digital Artist
I am absolutely FLOORED. Seriously, my face is burning. And you have a lovely voice!
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Jon-Wood Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Thank'ee!
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BelchimaeraStarsong Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013   General Artist
.....I think I may follow in your footsteps. >D
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:iconjon-wood:
Jon-Wood Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Well, link me when you do.
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TheLaughingDreamer Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Awesome job. The words flow so swiftly and the rhythm is excellent. Well deserved dd
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WritingGlasses Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013
Wow... I have never been much of a poetry lover but I have to say this is good. You did an excellent job and the DD is well deserved.
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:iconzwecat:
zwecat Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013   Digital Artist
I'm glad you liked it. :D Thanks a lot.
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WritingGlasses Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013
You're very welcomed. Keep up the great work
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autumscars Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
it's beautiful, you deserved this DD! :)
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IyraEMM Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ha! that is amazing.
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HoneyBadgerChan Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013
this is BEAUTIFUL!! The last verse sent shivers down my spine, this is amazing, lovely rhyming, its just so free flowing, at the perfect pace...
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zwecat Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013   Digital Artist
fffs

thank you;; :iconmoeblushplz:
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girrl88 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Sooo good. The rhythm flows and the rhymes don't sound forced. And as a music person I really appreciate the musical references and their symbolism.

You deserve the DD.
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:iconzwecat:
zwecat Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013   Digital Artist
That means a lot to me. Thank you QQ
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Wooltree Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013
Wonderfully written and the rhythm is just beautiful :)
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