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i'm built on broken bones and metronomes
her alto trills, his hollow tones
a second verse she'll never know
so sweet and sweet and down we go

the cords stretch and scratch but never match
the off beat tears he'll surely catch
the droplets lead a song of their own
recorded on heartstrings, a song i know

his words they ring and the hurt they bring
it's been so long but i choose to sing
and maybe he'll hear the music we make
( it's been so long but i choose to break. )
i'm sick and my mind is on music and a inner fight to continue writing a little story of mine.

edit: oh my gosh, i am speechless. thank you so much for the D.D (it's my first) :iconloveloveplz:
edit2: I AM OVERFLOWING WITH EMOTION. Thank you all SO much for your kind words and favorites.
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Daily Deviation

Given 2013-01-02
harmonize by ~Kiirohi ( Suggested by 0hgravity and Featured by thorns )
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FieryDownpour479 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I stumbled across this ages ago, but I only favorited it. I never left you a comment, which seems silly to me know considering how much I love this piece! I constantly go back to it, because I love it so much. It's probably one of my most favorite poems I have ever heard or read. It's so beautiful, and because I love music probably more than anything else, that just makes this even more special. I cannot express how much I love this piece, but I do want you to know just how wonderful it is :)
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zwecat Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013
Wow, thank you for your comment! :iconblushingplz: Your words really mean a lot to me.  I'm glad that you found this piece so enjoyable, and are also a fellow music lover.  I in fact wrote this with some feelings still lingering around over my very last choral class.  Thank you once again!! 
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FieryDownpour479 Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You are very welcome! I'm very glad I was able to read this piece! And you are welcome again! :meow:
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Adonael Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Found this through the features but only just realised it made DD as well. Congratulations!

I really enjoyed the rhythm of it - iambic quadrameter??
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zwecat Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013
Thanks! And I wish I could say I went through a lot of planning for this, but I just went with what felt/sounded right. ^^;
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Adonael Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome. To be fair, it's often the best way.
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dreamsinstatic Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013
Your fantastic work has been featured in Friday Night Features.
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zwecat Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013
Thank you! :D
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dreamsinstatic Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013
You're welcome.
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saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
lovely. truly lovely. (but i caught a typo; i belive it is chords in music, but perhaps you did mean cords...)
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